Silver age classic scene: FF#51 This man, this...2

Fantastic Four issues 51 - how do you follow the defeat of Galactus and saving the world?
With a tale of redemption, heroism and sacrifice.
The dialogue is corny, you could drive a truck through the plot holes, some events are plain silly, and overall it is magnificent.

I did several versions of this and didn't like any of them.
First it was going to be a 'montage' but that just looked messy.
Then I decided the preceding scenes should be projected onto the background of our her's last moments, but that looked even more messy.
I present both versions for you to judge.

Pencil and some watercolour on paper, scanned and coloured with smoothdraw3